Hi Indi I enjoyed reading your holiday writing as it sounds like you had a lot of fun and it is always nice to spend time with family and friends. You are separating your paragraphs out nicely and I like how you have used speech marks to show people talking. There are only a couple of places in your writing when your grammar is not correct but overall a very good piece of writing. Ka pai!
Hi Indi
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your holiday writing as it sounds like you had a lot of fun and it is always nice to spend time with family and friends.
You are separating your paragraphs out nicely and I like how you have used speech marks to show people talking. There are only a couple of places in your writing when your grammar is not correct but overall a very good piece of writing. Ka pai!
Thank you for commenting on my work Ms Barrow! I will
ReplyDeletefollow your suggestions next time I am writing. Thanks again Indi.